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              The topic I have chosen to do my discursive essay is if we have lost our social lives due to modern technology. I will be going over the two different opinions on it if modern technology has taken over our lives or if we are still hanging out with eachother.
              It all started, say, ten-fifteen years ago with technological development and introducement of social networks such as Facebook and Myspace. From the very beginning, people liked it and some, as a matter of fact, gradually became addicted to it. My opinion is that the very first days played the key role in all this. They submitted to it and this is how I think we lost our social lives.
              On the other hand, some were brave enough to put a limit to, for example, spending your time on the computer. In my view, nothing is impossible and you have to be a strong-minded person in order to know how to deal with such things.
              However, not all are able to control their desires, hence, I believe that modern technology has infiltrated into our social lives and is keeping us trapped in its world.
              I acknowledge that we have thrown away the way of life that was usual ten-fifteen years ago, but now, there is a new way of communication amongst people, especially the youngsters. What good and what less good things are to come out of that is yet to be seen.


Molim vas za realnu procjenu, hvala!  :)

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              The topic I have chosen to do my discursive essay is if we have lost our social lives due to modern technology. I will be going over the two different opinions on it if modern technology has taken over our lives or if we are still hanging out with eachother.
              It all started, say, ten-fifteen years ago with technological development and introducement of social networks such as Facebook and Myspace. From the very beginning, people liked it and some, as a matter of fact, gradually became addicted to it. My opinion is that the very first days played the key role in all this. They submitted to it and this is how I think we lost our social lives.
              On the other hand, some were brave enough to put a limit to, for example, spending your time on the computer. In my view, nothing is impossible and you have to be a strong-minded person in order to know how to deal with such things.
    However, not all are able to control their desires, hence, I believe that modern technology has infiltrated into our social lives and is keeping us trapped in its world.
              I acknowledge that we have thrown away the way of life that was usual ten-fifteen years ago, but now, there is a new way of communication amongst people, especially the youngsters. What good and what less good things are to come out of that is yet to be seen.






Pozdrav!
Evo samo cu ti pregledati formu, malo vokabulara i procijeniti argumente i smisao recenica.


Dakle, ovo crveno. Hmmmm... The topic I have chosen to do my discursive essay is if we have lost our social lives due to modern technology. - to nemoj pisati jer ces imati zadanu temu i po tome ti temu nisi izabrao. Umjesto toga napisi neku recenicu koja uvodi u tu temu.

Ovo zeleno prekrizeno... ne mozes napisati svoje misljenje odamh u razradi nego u zakljucku. Jedino u zakljucku pises svoje osobno misljenje i zauzimas odredjenu stranu, a u razradi odnosno argumenti za i protiv objektivno sagledavas i pises. Ti moras pisati raspravljacki esej, u kojem ces tocno dati cinjenice sto je dobro sto lose. Ti uopce u pocetku drugog odlomka nisi pisao argumente. Taj dio mi je vise za uvod.

Ljubicasto...tu je tolika zbrka. Kao sto rekoh ne dajes cinjenice, sto je bitno. Trebas doslovno reci zasto je izgubljen drustveni zivot zbog tih i tih razloga, previse opcenito pises.

Ovo tirkizno treba biti zakljucak (dakle jedan odlomak) i zakljucak kao takav je dobar. Inace imas dobar izbor rijeci, recenice fino sastavljas ali malo ides sa teme. Samo napravi 4 odlomka (uvod, argumenti za, argumenti protiv i zakljucak)
Sretno!
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Puno hvala.. Ja sam inače dao to nastavnici i ona mi je iste te stvari rekla, hehehe...  :D

I da.. Zahvaljujem što si mi rekla da znam birati riječi i da dobro sastavljam rečenice, jer planiram upisati engleski i povijest.. Pa ono.. Bitno mi je..

U međuvremenu sam još nekih 5 eseja napisao i predao nastavnici i svaki mi je bio sve bolji i bolji.. Bit će dobro! :D

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E to je dobro za cuti, samo ih pisi sto vise ;)

Evo neka ti jos netko napise osvrt bolje je cuti vise misljenja ;D
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