Computers broaden our mind. They narrow down our life horizons.   Share 

ninaA7x

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Computers have become the integral part and are very important in our everyday life. We use them as an help in vast range of things – from education to bill payment. But computers and internet can also lead to addiction and social disconnection from others – do the pros still prevail over cons?

   First of all, we all know the benefits of computers and how they make our lives simpler and better. They have became unavoidable in terms of staying updated about all things we’re interested in and still waste insignificant amount of time on it. Also, computers are able to develop and upgrade our knowledge and logical skills.
   On the other hand, needlessness of being in direct contact with other people while we perform our everyday tasks could also be a disadvantage and lead us to disconnection and detachment from others, Furthermore, the lack of social interaction has became a big issue amongst todays youth and it all goes against computers and modern technology. Computers also cause the worrying number of illnesses, and many abuse their abilities

   In conclusion, I consider computers something very useful and essential in todays society. They may cause plenty of bad effects on people, but, with proper usage, their features offer much more then they can damage.


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Computers have become the integral part and are very important in [integral part = very important, ne ponavljaj nepotrebno] of our everyday life. We use them as an [an samo ispred samoglasnika] help in vast range of things areas ili activities ili tako nešto bolje – from education to bill payment. But computers and internet can also lead to addiction and social disconnection isolation from others – do the pros still prevail over cons?

   First of all, we all know the benefits of computers and how they make our lives simpler and better. They have became unavoidable in terms of staying updated about all things we’re interested in and still waste insignificant amount of time on it. Also, computers are able to develop and upgrade our knowledge and logical skills.
   On the other hand, needlessness of being in direct contact with other people while we perform our everyday tasks could also be a disadvantage and lead us to disconnection and detachment [opet, disconnection = detachment - ostavljam ti precizniju i napredniju riječ] from others, Furthermore, the lack of social interaction has became a big issue amongst todays youth and it all goes against computers and modern technology. Computers also cause the a worrying number of illnesses, and many abuse their abilities. [što si tim zadnjim htjela reći?]

   In conclusion, I consider computers something very useful and essential in todays society. They may cause plenty of bad effects on people, but, with proper usage, their features offer much more then than they can damage.
Prvi odlomak razrade ti je prenerazvijen, i količinski i sadržajno, osobito budući da je to strana za koju si se opredijelila. Drugi je količinski dobar, no nema baš jasne argumente.
čak ni kemičari ne mogu ukloniti plemeniti plin iz "nemoguće" niti plemeniti metal iz "nikad"

ninaA7x

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sto je tako lose? dobila sam 5 iz eseja  >:(
a ovo "many abuse their abilities" bi trebalo biti o tome kako se lako internet moze iskoristiti u neprimjerene svrhe

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Pa nije TAKO LOŠE, no ja ne bih dala 5  :-X A uvijek može biti i bolje, pa potrudimo se :)
čak ni kemičari ne mogu ukloniti plemeniti plin iz "nemoguće" niti plemeniti metal iz "nikad"

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They have become unavoidable in terms of staying updated about all things we’re interested in and still waste insignificant amount of time on it.

How does one miss that? :P